tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8785065039608350318.post6909659687868675077..comments2023-09-07T04:49:10.648-07:00Comments on Literature and the Contemporary: Second Parable of The Sower; Prompt 1Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8785065039608350318.post-68804598943030508272011-03-13T11:13:24.917-07:002011-03-13T11:13:24.917-07:00In some ways, I think this is your best work. Tha...In some ways, I think this is your best work. That's not because it's polished or finished in any way, because it isn't. In fact, it doesn't really connect well between paragraphs, or sometimes even between sentences: you jump freely from one idea to another, without really elaborating on any of them, or really working with the text on any of them. Your interpretation of page 73 is a bit of an exception, but it's still brief and underdeveloped.<br /><br />I still like a lot of what's here because it's very rich in ideas. "Change will set you free" is a really interesting way to a approach the novel; thinking about Butler's interest in Lauren's violation of social norms is also good, as is the hard fact that most of the time, most of us don't consider how our actions impact others. I also thought your analysis of the problems of Lauren't world, and the difficulties she'd face in really changing things, had merit.<br /><br />The problem with all of it isn't ideas; you have at least half a dozen ideas for good essays here. What you need(ed) to do is pick one of these ideas, and explore it in depth. If you're interested in her theology of change, that's good. If you're interested in her violation of social norms, that's good, etc. Your verse was plenty good enough to deal with any of it - you just had to be a little more focused.<br /><br />One clear argument, from beginning to end - that needs to be your goal. Generate the good ideas first (you're doing that here), but then you need to focus on one of them.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com