tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8785065039608350318.post3647592178060096786..comments2023-09-07T04:49:10.648-07:00Comments on Literature and the Contemporary: RevisionAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8785065039608350318.post-61281131844276387922011-02-27T12:29:57.453-08:002011-02-27T12:29:57.453-08:00I see several components here.
First, you have th...I see several components here.<br /><br />First, you have the initial argument, which goes something like "Gardner challenges our conventional notions of what a hero is and does." This argument has potential, but you drop it.<br /><br />Then, you have the second argument: "the women of Beowulf's time deserve more credit." Focusing on the women of Beowulf and/or Grendel is a fine idea; questioning the way they are perceived is good, but whose perceptions are you challenging? Those of the Beowulf poet? Of Gardner? Of us? Of Porter? In other words - the general topic is fine, but it's hard for me to figure out exactly who you're addressing, and exactly what point you're trying to make.<br /><br />These two argument are both worthwhile. Individually, they are underdeveloped. I actually like the second one more in theory, but the first one is better in practice, because you're more focused there.<br /><br />I feel like this is your best work so far, most likely, and I feel like you're starting to find your voice. This could have been a genuinely good piece of work if you'd focused on one single argument, and figured out exactly what *you* have to say about it. Your research was more than satisfactory, and there are two good short blog posts in here - it's just that they needed more development when taken together.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com